One of the essays I chose for this blog was “The American Male at Age Ten” by Susan Orlean. This essay, which I sadly tried hard to keep my biography close too, and failed, is a great biography. It takes a person named Colin Duffy and reflects upon his childhood, as if you were there to see if for yourself. I found it a hilariously good idea about making fake evil spider webs, in fact I should probably find a way to do it to my roommate. That whole story made me feel as if I knew Colin myself. I think it’s the amount of detail that would benefit me the most. I can honestly say that I lack the attention to detail in my blogs to make them great. In the future I am going to try to pay more attention to this, and try harder to apply more detail. Another great thing about this essay is the voice. The author makes the story sound so genuine, I almost think that Colin is a ten year old kid and the writer is just doing the essay for one of her elementary school essays.
The second essay I chose for this blog was “Reading History to my Mother” by Robin Hemley. This essay took a normal everyday scenario, a son hanging out with his mother, and made it ”some what interesting”. I say this because I found it quite dry, but just the care the writer but into the essay was fantastic. The writer put great effort in explaining this scenario, and make it flow evenly and was grammatically great. This is something that I need in my post. Just more attention to grammatical, and how to extend an essay about nothing so it is longer. I mean heck, this guy wrote ten pages about his mom.
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Well-written and great detailed blog you got there Blake! I like your honest criticism of your own writing, on the other hand, I find your writing quite interesting, well-written, and you pay close attention to some detail. With writing, even the best writer will always find ways to improve his/her writing further. I am going to take some of your advice into my blog writing as well. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteOverall you did a great job explaining what you admired the most out of these two essays you picked. One more thing, you said: "Just more attention to grammatical, and how to extend an essay about nothing so it is longer." I always tell myself not to extend an essay just so it is longer unless it is necessary because sometimes it just drags... :)
I would like to first and foremost great blog and excellent insight. I can personally relate to everything you mentioned. My biggest problem with the blog’s is my lack of grammatical excellence. My grammar lacks in a major way, I sometimes believe that my points are lost in the mist of my bad grammar. I also loved the Susan Orlean essay; I would find myself forgetting that it was not an elementary school aged person writing the story. The Essay was fluent paid a lot of attention to detail; I only wish I could express mine in the same way. The only thing grammatically I can suggest is that you read over for sentence fluidity, I only found one minor mistake. Great blog, I could really relate and I think relating to your members blog helps me comment better.
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